Mirror Haiku for you!!!
Look into it now
Coldness, warmth, what is it
Mirror shows too much.
Not seeing what is
Snow color makes older, yet
Mirror sees younger.
Looking inside to
Find warmth, not there for me
Break the mirror.
Mirror saw beauty,
New rose brings much color,
Ear very pretty.
Cracking the mirror,
Ice too cold once put outside,
Snowflakes cool it.
Toss mirror away,
Leaves fall, cover it up,
Spider sees new mate.
Mist rises up top,
Sun beats down upon mirror
waiting for raindrop.
Mirror sees pretty
Girl covers face with mittens,
Smile peeking out.
Reflection one sees
Budding child will giggle,
New joy in mirror.
Mirror, mirror who
Am I this spring day, a
Toad one kisses, not!
Jump into mirror,
Break into tiny seeds,
Be a new you, grow.
Mirror truly sees
Hot air, nothing there in me,
Save me, shut me up.
I see love for you,
Mirror shows it in my soul,
Blossoms surely grow.
Mirror are you real?
Relfect snowflakes falling
As my tears will drop.
See it, believe it,
A true mirror cannot lie,
Spring is coming.
Haiku is a form of Japanese poetry. Each poem consists of only 3 lines, the first line has 5 syllables, the second line has 7 syllables, and the third line has 5 syllables for a total of 17 syllables. Haiku traditionally is supposed to be written about nature and must include a season. There should be a point and counterpoint aspect to the poem and sarcasm is very welcome. A good haiku is understood no more than 70%, a great haiku is understood no more than 50%, so I take it to mean that the less sense it makes then the better the poem. When over 70% of the poem is understood then it is just an average poem.
Subby told me he thought I would be good at doing Haiku's. I am not sure but so far they are seeming to come fairly easy. I am also not sure if I am supposed to understand it, probably not, so I will have to work on that part.
Subby suggested to me to mix up my Theme Thursdays and to not just always write Opal Nation's. So I guess I will alternate things now and just throw in an Opal Nation here and there or do one with something else too. We will have to see how things go since I really liked Subby's idea. He is a smart guy and a good friend. I trust him to give me good advice.
I would like to ask all of you to let me know how well you think I did on these Haiku's and any ideas on what to do to improve them would be most welcome. I think they are pretty fun to do and if you haven't tried them then maybe you might want to sometime.
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26 comments:
I'm not familar enough with that form of poetry to venture an opinion other than I really enjoyed. I miss your comments at Tangled webs.
Come over for a visit. Hope you are feeling much better.
I love your haikus - I love the fact that you have tried them - sometimes they are not easy. I cheat and write haiku on EmmaLou, Golden Destroyer - she's a part of nature. Here's one for you just because:
//She lies at my feet //was that a burp I just heard? //she's a happy girl
Hugs and blessings!
I love haikus, too. Their starkness is so lush, right? But I am not a very good critic. I only know what I like. And I especially like the "not" on the end. So unexpected!
Loved the haikus!
Sherry, I always wondered about how you injured your shoulder. Oh boy, sounds like you're in it for the long run.
I have to be very careful with my skin, too. It runs in the family plus I am fair plus I have some sun damage already.
Aw, sorry to read that it keeps being so hard for you. :(
You hang in there nice and strong, ok?
Not bad for a start, kiddo! Mark over at walking man set me right on the true Japanese style...like my early work, yours shows some emotion( which I learned wasn't true Haiku, but the Americanised style ). Leah over at Weatherinthestreetschallenged me to do Tanka...I'll be back with the link to that. These are deep enough, here and I like :)
Mrsupole, you can view the post here and take the links and have a go at the Tanka...it's a bit longer to work with and allows for more creativity ;) Will be doing more of it, anon...and big hugs!
Loved these Mrsupole, and you are right about Subby. It looks like he gave you and interesting link to follow up. I hope the shoulder is healing, too.
I don't know much about Haiku, Sherry. But I enjoyed these very much. Loved the one about the little girl and the mittens.
Dave King has been posting a series of haikus. One or two a day, he is in the #40+ now. You'll find his link in a comment on my today's post, Gazed and Confused.
He lives in England and does a lot of haikus about people and things that are going on there that are fun and often an enigma to me, which, if what you wrote is true, is a good thing. If you stop by his blog, tell him I sent ya. He's a good guy.
You mean I can blame Subby for not having another segment of Opal Nation? Just wait, subby...just wait! Ha! Seriously, that's a lot of haikus! I always thought haiku was a Japanese sneeze or soemthing...
I have no idea, but looks like you did a great job! Ask Subby!
actually i think you did marvelously...i have so much trouble with haiku...i bow to your grace....
Hmmm... understood by the author or by the reader? Therein lies the magic of haiku.
Sometimes, the best mirror I’ve got is the look in my daughter’s eyes.
If that is the Haiku criteria, then this is your best one in my humble opinion:
Mirror truly sees
Hot air, nothing there in me,
Save me, shut me up.
Lovely haikus.
I am just starting to write them.
looking forward to learning from you!
hugs
shakira
I really like your haiku, especially the one that begins "jump into mirror."
It is fun to exhaust the possibilities... then we see so very many more. -J
And I thought "haiku" was some kind of Sushi or somethin'?
How's your little Maggie doin'???
Nice.
But isn't warmth one syllable?
That's really good Mrsupole!Love it!
Sorry Mrs, not a poetry fan which is so weird because I visit loads of sites where people enjoy writing all sorts of poetry. Not a bad idea to mix up the Opal Nation a bit although I must admit, I look forward to it each Thursday. As for mirrors? I find looking in the mirror without my glasses on is far more satisfying than with! You have a grand weekend.
Just want to say...
Mine is here
http://justmeshakirack.blogspot.com/2010/02/mirrors-of-my-life-thursday-theme.html
HAPPY VALENTINE'S DAY!
and
GONG XI FA CAI!
(means WISHING YOU PROSPERITY! in Mandarin, Chinese)
hugs
shakira
beautiful --loved them all! c
*smooches* from your favorite 4-legged blogger.
How is your shoulder?
Here is my haikuku for you:
Yeah, i love my food.
Your table scraps rock my world.
hot dogs and french fries!
This was lovely, scrumptious. Enjoyed the single long experience of reading all the haikus as a single poem. Keep writing them, in my opinion.
P.S. Here is a really interesting little discussion of the haiku form. It's fun and informative:
(you'll have to copy and paste this)
http://picsandpoems.blogspot.com/2010/01/haiku-as-i-see-it.html
Then if art were a Haiku poem and I understand about 10 percent of it that would make art great!
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